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It’s like when you ran over my cat last December and I said it was okay but it really wasn’t and you tighten your grip on my arm and I don’t care anymore because, fuck, it was just a cat right?
Or when we went bowling and I pulled sevens and nines all night and you bowled strike after strike after golden strike and I swear you were immaculate and floating when you jumped victorious and I sat by the score sheet and all the powers of man and nature and beast and god were barely able to keep my head up and my eyes focused on the ocular feast, the glory of you.
And when we were walking home after the movies and the wind blew acerbic and jealous and stricken blind, groping to finger flesh within our coats and scarves and boots like the denizens of Sodom and Gomorrah and we are as Lot’s daughters left like the lamb for the spiritual slaughter but the angels come in the form of your father in the family minivan offering us a ride and I desperately want to say yes but you say we’re fine so he drives away and I watch him leave and turn to salt but you just grab at my gray granulated hands and drag me along behind you.
Or when we got our finals back from that author seminar you know I tried so hard in and you got an A- and I got a D and my head hit the desk like a hollow bone stamp and you leveled your eyes with mine and told me it just stands for “Damn, you’re cute” and we laced our fingers like corsets or thigh-high boots or nineteenth century shirt sleeves and everything was comfortable and clean until you hit my fucking cat and this is all out of order but I think I just wanted to say I would be nothing if not for you so thanks I guess.
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:iconreanimated4now:
~Reanimated4now Dec 13, 2009  Professional General Artist
acerbic

hollow bone stamp

and
the lacings

this was so real I think it's almost perfect.
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:iconammeel:
I've had this saved in my bookmarks for a while as something to come back to and reflect on. And no matter how many times I open it up thinking "hmm what was this again?" and read it aloud to myself, I exit the tab thinking to myself, "what else is there to say".
Except that, I guess. I wish I could say that I'm speechless, but apparently I am not.
Pretty awesome.
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:iconinshiningarmor:
best comment ever. thank you so much :]
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:iconalistad:
stream of consciousness is the best ^^ i really like this piece, can't say why but i just do.
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:iconmxskai:
Your run-on sentences are absolutely beautiful. XO And I like how you linked the first and last ideas together. The running-over-your-cat thing. :D
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:iconwakingxdawn:
its pretty enough to be considered poetry
but raw enough to give it impact.
i imagine a teenage boy venting to a poor soul
who was considerate enough to ask what was wrong haha

I loveee this.
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:iconelephant-ears:
This reminded me of Junior, by Macaulay Culkin, except that it was better-written and I didn't giggle. My favourite part was how I didn't relate to it at all, because I hate when writers try and drag you into their shit and you feel like, if this hadn't happened to me would I really give a fuck?
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:iconinshiningarmor:
i think that last part was a... compliment? i hope so.

and i was never a big fan of macaulay culkin, so i very much approve of you thinking i write better than him. silly actors should stay silly actors! not silly writers!
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:iconelephant-ears:
It was a compliment, in the most bizarre of ways of course.

I think Macaulay Culkin's writing a book was flaunting the laws that separate the attractive (actors) and unattractive (writers), but I read it anyway. Several times. So did all of my friends. We destroyed it writing notes to one another between the lines. It's what he deserved I'm sure.
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