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It’s like when you ran over my cat last December and I said it was okay but it really wasn’t and you tighten your grip on my arm and I don’t care anymore because, fuck, it was just a cat right?
Or when we went bowling and I pulled sevens and nines all night and you bowled strike after strike after golden strike and I swear you were immaculate and floating when you jumped victorious and I sat by the score sheet and all the powers of man and nature and beast and god were barely able to keep my head up and my eyes focused on the ocular feast, the glory of you.
And when we were walking home after the movies and the wind blew acerbic and jealous and stricken blind, groping to finger flesh within our coats and scarves and boots like the denizens of Sodom and Gomorrah and we are as Lot’s daughters left like the lamb for the spiritual slaughter but the angels come in the form of your father in the family minivan offering us a ride and I desperately want to say yes but you say we’re fine so he drives away and I watch him leave and turn to salt but you just grab at my gray granulated hands and drag me along behind you.
Or when we got our finals back from that author seminar you know I tried so hard in and you got an A- and I got a D and my head hit the desk like a hollow bone stamp and you leveled your eyes with mine and told me it just stands for “Damn, you’re cute” and we laced our fingers like corsets or thigh-high boots or nineteenth century shirt sleeves and everything was comfortable and clean until you hit my fucking cat and this is all out of order but I think I just wanted to say I would be nothing if not for you so thanks I guess.
©2008-2010 ~InShiningArmor
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whatever.

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:iconstof-grey:
This is... intense. Provoking? Yes, I think that's a very nice word for it.

And it has an absolutely wonderful flow.
:iconinshiningarmor:
thank you. i didnt spend more than 20 minutes on this, which is embarrassing and uncharacteristic and im not even sure why i wrote it but im glad you like it :]

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Like father, like gun.
Like mother, like run.
:iconlov3magician:
He... ran over your cat, or did that stand for something. o _ o

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Just be happy you're not dead.
:iconinshiningarmor:
theres probably something deeper, but maybe not. maybe its all just what appears on the surface. maybe its all just dirty rain water pooling in the dent on the hood of your car.

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Like father, like gun.
Like mother, like run.
:iconsymbi0sis:
It sounds like feeling trying to pose as indifference. Nice job.

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Now you know me
And I'm not afraid
And I want to tell you who I am
Can you help me be a man
They can't break me
As long as I know who I am
:iconinshiningarmor:
thanks

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Like father, like gun.
Like mother, like run.
:iconlov3magician:
Well, whether it does or doesn't, I still liked your poem :D

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Just be happy you're not dead.
:iconestallidos:
fiction?

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coming up roses everywhere you go.
:iconinshiningarmor:
i dont know. maybe.

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Like father, like gun.
Like mother, like run.
:iconrah-nonameforme:
I like it.
You have a strange style, but it works.
It sounds breathless and pure and it's the type of thing I wish I could say.
Mainly because my thoughts make sense to me, but the words never form themselves in the right way, they over themselves and form a big muddy pile of literary nonsense, and I'm left making little sense to anyone.

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